Talk:The Story of a Minifigure: Strange Odd Shadow/@comment-27324808-20200913004047

Wow, I read the original over 3 years ago? Dang, life sure was a lot different for me back then. I would have thought I read it more recently.

Anyway.

Cool how the new chapter is as long as the first two combined. It's not a bad thing, it means more story.

Beck Strongheart must really see something in Shadow or he's not really as firm as he's presenting himself to the recruits. One thing The Story of a Minifigure does is show the realistic grittiness of the war and what's at stake against the Maelstrom. They're actually pretty horrific here. When I read the scenes I imagine the perspective from Shadow's eyes rather than the more overhead camera view from the game, I suppose what this means is you do really well putting the reader in Shadow's perspective. I felt his struggles with the training course. There is a lot more to LU in here than in LU itself. It's like if LU was remastered, realistically. It's really realistic.

I don't remember if this is how you did Survival in the original version but I like it very much.

Strongheart's pretty cool. Him being busy and people having to find time to access him is in particular a realistic take on the fellow, given his position.

I feel like the transition into the Survival was a bit sbrupt and detached but it's not really an issue.

All in all a very good chapter. You've come a long way.