User blog comment:Wiz Ardon, the Peculiar Enchanter/The Story of a Minifigure: Strange Odd Shadow Rewrite Chapter 3/@comment-28545852-20170601014703/@comment-28545920-20170603210346

Forgive my tardiness, but I finally got around to reading this! I agree with Strider on the Daredevil gear stuff. I find it to be an excellent balance between Shadow experimenting with the gear and finding that it's not to his liking. I like the touch with the Maelstrom being odorous. Also, I vote you keep the Darkitect scene, as it reminds the reader that there are more things happening than just the beginning quest chain.

Edit: Speaking of the Darkitect scene, the laugh is described as having no merry in it. Merry isn't a noun so that sounds a bit strange, just thought I'd mention that.